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托福作文时间短，使命大，许多考生会在语法、句型及拼写等方面犯过错。本来这些过错在托福备考过程中，我们也可能会犯，不过因为不重视，或许无人点拨，所以没有及时改正。本文中，小编为我们整理一篇高一生的托福作文的点评，期望对我们有所协助。

托福写作：

Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

托福写作范文：

Nowadays the food we eat is prepared fast and it really had an influence in our life. With all the aspects concerned, the change is considered to be negative.

As the time of the preparation is shortened, the nutrition in the food is reduced as well. Food producers do not focus on how much the protein and the vitamins should be contain, instead they just want to make the preparation shorter and shorter, which will be more efficient to satisfy the customers’ need, and this will help them to earn more money. Because of this reason, we can not obtain much nutrition from the food but only calories, and they do nothing to health.

Another aspect must not be ignored is that food plays an important role in our daily life. Sometimes we use food of various styles, tastes and colors to express our feelings just like musicians use tunes to express their passions. Fast preparation makes it impossible to show its advantage in art. All the food are the same taste, same style, and it makes the meal boring. Some people may even lose their appetite for meals as they are offered such a dull supper.

As you can see, the fast food preparations have many disadvantages although we could not neglect that it supply enough time to those businessmen and businesswomen who are working hard everyday always have no time for meals. But to make a thoroughly thinking, fast food make people fail to take into account that food is also vital in our life and is certainly an art, it still has more negative impacts in our life.

托福作文点评1：

instead they just want to make the preparation shorter and shorter, which will be more efficient to satisfy the customers’ need;这一句和宗旨有抵触;能够去掉这句，仅仅说为了赚钱;

All the food are the same taste, same style;--这个太片面了，感受不太让人信任，你能够要点举一两个比如说明味道不好，或许让人没有胃口;

Some people may even lose their appetite for meals as they are offered such a dull supper. --这儿的supper不能代替food;

总体上来说还是不错的，句型简洁，通俗易懂，假如再证明方面多加润饰的话，作用会非常好一些，加油!

托福作文点评2：

不知道你自个改了没有,第一句话就有时态的过错...判分一下就很晦气 。