新托福TOEFL-iBT综合写作例文托福备考资料(四)4


时间:2018/4/15
作者:辛达托福代报名小编
-返回首页 / 返回文章列表


辛达托福代报考位:到2018年4月14日上午托福官网没有释放考位,在此提醒广大考生抓紧时间报名,注意自己的考试时间,如对托福报名有任何疑问,欢迎咨询在线客服

Score 3 Response

The lecturer provide the opposite opinion concerning what the article offered. The team work often bring negative effect. As we all know superficially, team work and team spirits are quite popular in today‘s business world and also the fashionable terms.

However, the lecturer find deeper and hiding results.

Firstly, the working results of team members can‘t be fully valued. For example, if a team member does nothing in the process of team discussion, decision making -and final pratice, his or her work deliquency will not be recognized because we only emphasize team work. Also, the real excellent and creative member‘s work might be obliterated for the same reason. Secondly, the team work might lose its value when team members are leading by several influential people in the group. One to the essential merits of team is to avoid the individule wrong. But one or two influential or persuasive people will make the team useless.

Thirdly, team work often become the excuse of taking responsibility. All in charge, nobody care.

All in all, what we should do is the fully distinguish the advantages and disadvantages of a concept or widely used method. That is to keep the common sense.

Rater‘s Comments

This response frames the issue well. The first point is clearly stated and accurately conveys the lecturer‘s comments about team members who contribute very little and team members who   contribute a great deal. However, the writer discusses the second point about influencers in   somewhat error-prone or vague and non-idiomatic language ("hiding results" "working results"   and "when team members are leading by... influential people"). The point about influencers   drops off at making the team "useless" and does not fully explain the reason these influencers   create problems. The final point beginning with the word "thirdly" is not fully related to the pas-   sage and lecture, and the meaning of it is unclear. This response illustrates many of the typical   features that can cause a response to receive the score of 3.

大家在进行托福备考的同时,如果对考位方面也比较紧张,可联系辛达代报为您服务 





☆转载声明: 各位同行和网友们,欢迎转载或引用在本站的文章,敬请标注原文出自辛达托福代报网!

其他文章推荐

各版块深度解析

托福口语高分突破指南:从思维构建到精准表达

托福阅读词汇题

英语发音常见误区

托福阅读精读训练体系

辛达代报名网站编辑部



上一篇:新托福TOEFL-iBT综合写作例文托福备考资料(四)3

下一篇:新托福TOEFL-iBT综合写作例文托福备考资料(五)