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　写作高分必备：

　　1.名师辅导写作高分窍门

　　2.不断实习高分窍门

　　3.名师指点修正

　　窍门

　　1.学会迅速审题－依据题干，判别题型，决定解题方法.

　　2.学会迅速打开文章构造－详细包含最初段，观点，让步段，结尾段的详细打开窍门和言语点.

　　3.学会多元化打开中心段有些－学会写比如，细节，重逻辑串联，忌细节堆砌.

　　修正

　　写作高分，除了以上所说到的把握窍门意外，别的需求的是各位宝宝们的不断践行；关于基础一般的同学一开端的进程会被骂的狗血淋头，由于文章不忍目睹；等作文能够安稳24分左右今后；你所需求做的工作即是将那些写的现已能看的作文，经过名师辅导修正成一篇真实的高分文章，最终一步嘛；当然即是背背背啦！这可比漫无目的的去背诵林林总总的范文提高的要快的多；由于你所背诵的文章思路是你自个的，大有些的言语安排也是你自个的。

　　下面就向各位宝宝们展现下什么叫做一篇投入汗水的精心修改（黄色为标题；黑色为未修改的作文；赤色为修改和主张有些；蓝色为整体评语）；

　　Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Environmental issues can be solved or improved in the future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

　　文章优势：观点鲜明，构造清晰，有比如和细节，言语表达尚可

　　需求改善的当地： 1.小语法错误 2.言语表达对比烦琐 3.逻辑上许多当地不精确 4.致命伤：中心段2观点不切题，阶段内的证明逻辑不清晰。

　　这篇文章妄图从两个视点证明环境会变好：

　　1.如今全球政府现已认识到，且开端举动－第一段主体段逻辑没有疑问

　　2.普通人的认识也正在逐步养成。－第二段主题段观点不扣题－不该当表达：提出环境保护认识是有用的办法。而应当表达为：跟过去比起来，如今的大家现已养成了保护环境的认识。言下之意，即是如今和将来的大家会主动的去保护环境。

　　Some people consider that environmental problems can be more awful in the future for they believe that the more advent technology, the more pollution will come out(想表达科技越领先，污染疑问越多应当改为， the more advanced the technology is, the more environmental problems would pop up).（主张全部语句修正为：In today’s society, many people consider the environment problems could be more awful in the future for the advent of more technological products like the automobile would lead to more serious environmental contamination） However, I believe that environment will be better tomorrow because the every country of the world have been going to take action to face the circumstance issues and human have recognized the importance of protecting surroundings as time goes on(去掉the, 谓语动词三单，介词of改为the 时态改为完成式即可——－ because every country in the world has prepared to take action to resolve environmental issue and the public has already recognized the importance of environmental conservation as time goes by ).

　　To begin with, environmental issues have become a major matter of concern for a number of countries. (增加过渡性短语- In this way,) This fact has led them to come up with many measures to solve the environmental problems(去掉后边的the 即 solve environmental problems). For instance, The United Nations Climate Change conference which about 192 countries attended was held in 2009, it aimed to discuss and put forward acts to cope with climatic change problems(第一个专有名词后边从句改为：The United Nations Climate Change conference attended by 192 countries was held in 2009 with the collective goal, that is, coping with the issue of climate change). There is no doubt that(少用套句，改为： Undoubtedly,) it has good impact on the tendency of changing climate on the Earth(这句话言语表达和上一句有重复且时态表达有疑问改为: the conference was a good start symbolizing the cooperation of the whole world to address environmental issue). And this is a know as‘ save the human last chance ’of the meeting(不要另起一句，直接and并排句即改为： … and it was known as a meeting of last chance to salvage human beings). Furthermore, more and more solar cars are produced, which are made to save energy to protect environment(furthermore表明递进or并排此处逻辑上不是很强，改为：as a consequence, the number of solar vehicles has experienced a dramatic increase. ). In a word, all of the actions are in order to prevent our Earth from destroying( in order to如此用肯定的中式英文，且总结的语句表达出来的意思并不能帮助总结这个阶段，应当与观点照应，表达出的大致含义应当是：因而能够看出，全球现已认识到环境疑问，且政府以及采取了许多举动，与下一段构成照应下一段应当以“普通人也养成了保护环境得意时”。所以应当改成： In a word, governments throughout the world have reached an agreement to protect the environment and taken immediate effective and potent measures to avert continual environmental deterioration).

　　In addition, raising environmental awareness can be an effective method to prevent and control pollution（观点扣题，应当改为： In addition, current individuals have already cultivated the awareness of environmental preservation and contributed a lot to environmental protection）. In contemporary society (in the …), many more people are concern about the environmental situation (are concerned about/ current environmental situation) . Another example of Beijing, which used to be an auto-dependent city, Shrouded by smothering smog for years, residents in Beijing have totally realized the severe consequences brought by heavy smog and are fully motivated to reduce the number of private cars, burn clean fuels and lead a low-carbon life (语句骨干构造应当是：北京被雾霾笼罩许多年，因而北京人知道了结果，开端被鼓励去削减适用私家车，焚烧洁净能源，过低碳日子。首要逻辑上：这句话的中文实际就不是很扣观点，应当改为，北京人认识到雾霾的结果，开端养成了后续的这些习气。其次言语上：北京被雾霾笼罩缺少谓语。主张整句话改为；Since citizens in Beijing shrouded by smothering smog for years realize the severe consequences of environmental pollution, they have gradually developed the habit of reducing the frequency of driving private cars, burning clean fuels and leading a low-carbon life). Therefore, government are required to offer more courses, videos and reports useful for raising public awareness on environmental protection in order to create a pleasant ecological environment with cleaner air(这句话的逻辑不通，作者观点环境将来会变好，这段的证明思路是；普通人认识到保护环境－比如；北京人遭到雾霾影响，因而改动了习气。接下来不该当说因而，政府需求去供给更多课。作者应当这么去表达，与此同时，如今的政府也会去做一些工作去加强大家的认识。所以这句应当改为： Meanwhile, the government also endeavors to strengthen people’s awareness of environmental protection by offering more public courses and related educational TV programs to create a favorable ecological environment). The example shows that our environmental circumstances will gradually get better(总结句仍然不扣题，应当改为，因而能够看出，如今普通人的做法现已发生了改动，他们的环保认识有利于将来环境质量的提高。所以表达为： Apparently, the behavior of common people has been changed and their strong consciousness of environmental protection is beneficial to the improvement of future environmental quality).

　　All in all, our environment will get better tomorrow. I feel hopeful that many more countries is going to take steps to face the environmental problems and more and more people have consciousness on the environmental protection. (小语法错误，别的语句不行精炼，谓语动词三单，is－are。整句主张改为； the efforts made by both the worldwide governments and ordinary individuals can explain why I am convinced that environment in the near future will be improved. )